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the woman i want to fuck the most
is an abstract concept;
hordes of leeches latch onto my sleeves as
i undress her only
to find a hole and/or bomb after un-
screwing her chest; and i trip
again because she is in my shadow,
slipping, disappearing, reappearing;
as i peel off its black paint, it
sticks to my nails;

not even a woman but a faceless trader
opening a box full of roaches into
my prying face;
as i step into brighter and brighter,
skin-peeling bright light, my shadow
slips through my toes, my brain
slowly processes thoughts
into sticky dimness;
i spin myself
into a cocoon trying to
corner it; meanwhile

she scatters into tiny particles because
she asks to be grasped in an equator-wide
embrace but i'm blind
in a blanket of light, picking
leeches and roaches;

what i want to dissolve into the most
twists back into a spider
at a certain point; there has to be
the least possible
concentration
of sediment -

the pinnacle of human
honesty beyond which one slips
back into a liar's skin.

mine hangs in bloody strands,
the hawk's cloak, the avenger's banner;
sometimes i close my eyes to blink and then in the stillness
the truth i lust after

skitters through the canopy.
mmh.
as we journey deeper into my irresistible stupidity slash naivety combination
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Given 2014-03-29
Unexpected, poignant: the itch by ghostinafog ( Suggested by DanielleIvanova and Featured by neurotype )
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
after your poems i can really only make noises not articulate sentences
youtu.be/F_XaIuw6K6Q?t=7s
you deserve this
so much :heart:
wow
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014
hah, that was awesome i love you
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i love your ability to dehumanize things. that's what iw anted to say. you are able to take these natural feelings and mechanize them. it's really fucking beautiful and how did i not favorite this the first time ugh i'm stupid
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robojigra Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014   Artist
the itch is a bitch a high pitched trip with hips long legs and lips leeches whip fibs teaching blood in drips
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irelandscotlanditaly Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014
thank ye
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palaeochannel6 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Well done.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thank you, comrade.
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drawitout Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional General Artist
This feels like one of those poems that will stick with me forever.
At the very least, I will definitely be coming back to read again as long as you have it posted here.
Amazing work.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
aw thank you. it feels good not to be forgotten
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OUTMACED121 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't get why you put on the Mature co--- oh. right.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
i know right 
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CosmicKat Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Professional Artist
interesting read
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thanksh
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CosmicKat Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Professional Artist
you're welcome
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NirvanaInKarma Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Queer I was listening to "Mask" by Bauhaus when I stumbled across this. It was eerily fitting :O
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
heyy that's probably my favourite bauhaus song :meow:
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NirvanaInKarma Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
Such a disgustingly underrated band~ Alucard Uh Oh 
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KatsuAshomi Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Pretty good imagery, a lot of metaphors and personification!
I think it's good! a bit of a dark twist but smells of a romance concept.

I dunno, just what I think haha, that's what I got out of the first stanza. Very good.
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KatsuAshomi Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Scratch metaphors, lol.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
hah, thanks
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kylah1000 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
woah what?
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
huh?
>_>
<_<
oh, just the wind
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kylah1000 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
wind?
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Writer
:D

About time you got a DD. 
Very well done :tighthug:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thanks :meow: 
came as a pleasant surprise - didn't expect that at all 
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Writer
Welcome :3
You should of, you're talent was bound to seep out into the DDsphere eventually.
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Footnoting Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
I have been reading poetry for forty-one years.  This is one of the most powerful I have ever read.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thank you so much. this really means a lot to me.
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Footnoting Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
It is I who should be thanking you.  Prior to finding your poems by random browsing, I had been reading and re-reading the same old thing, classics all but stuff I have read for decades, and I was looking for a new and exciting reading experience.  Your poems have provided that.
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angry-dog-for-life Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Beautiful piece, and congrats on the DD~
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thank you :meow:
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD!
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thanks, that was unexpected 
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BlackBowfin Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're ma hero
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GalacticNightmare21 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student
Wow, I love this so much. Good job!~ :meow:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
thank you :meow:
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J-Goth Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student General Artist
I like this, It's uncomfortable with some raunchiness to it and symbols that heighten the imagery. It reminds me of Bukowski in way, whom I've been very inspired by recently. You did a great job.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
i like bukowski a lot, so that's a huge compliment. much appreciated.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Dark and chaotic, the imagery pulls you in like a dream, leaves you feeling confused like everything makes sense yet it shouldnt-

Unfortunately, few of us lust enough for truth to spend our lives with her.
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
i'd lie to spend a night with her at least. and then smell her perfume for the rest of my life - or until next morning. 
thank you.
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Eremitik Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014
quite welcome.
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EdgeOfDestruction Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is what i call ironic! :meow:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
the irony of life :meow:
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EdgeOfDestruction Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yes! in all things! :meow:
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Haunting imagery. Gorgeous :heart:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014
aw thank you :heart:
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